I'm about to finish Chapter 6 of Pam and Jeremy. My thoughts so far:
I'm loving the very slow burn and build-up. Six chapters in, and this is the first time we see Jeremy get a complete handjob from the babysitter. He didn't even come until the previous chapter, and it was by himself. Everything else up to this has been teasing, doubt, guilt, will they/won't they. Also putting them in constant awkward, but easily believable situations, where it's like they're almost destined to fuck. It also makes total sense that the parents aren't paying attention to what's going on because they are fighting. Otherwise, Pam wouldn't be around anymore.
The author has clearly had some practice with writing before this. The prose is clear and engaging. The characterization is wonderful. Though it's entirely told from Pam's third person POV, we see Jeremy as a totally separate personality from hers, by way of his behavior and his actions.
I try not to expect too much from free online erotica. I've hit the back button more times than I have finished stories. My standards are as simple as "have good grammar" and "split your fucking paragraphs." This is really good.
THAT SAID...the age of the boy, and the fact that he only has dry orgasms, took me out of the "stand-in" feeling a little bit. We all bring our own preferences and niches to ss. In my personal fantasy headspace, I would be shooting ropes all over the place, hopefully aiming my cock at the babysitter's tits. What is about authors always wanting the boys to be 8-10? My ideal vicarious living is when I started getting really horny, and wanted to be fulfilled.
It's a little weird. But I'm so engrossed in the actual story, I'm not ready to bail out yet.